Does this song lyrics look natural?

I tried writing lyrics for the first time, and I'm curious if it sounds natural. I tried to make the lyrics as short as possible, so it might sound a bit strange. I wrote the lyrics below. [Key Context] **Verse 1** Walking pretending to be okay Will it be okay if I walk faster? Stumbling in the same place again The world is far away, I'm left behind Before it crumbles, your breath is close Two hearts under a starless night **Pre chorus** We were like a small miracle once Our names written side by side on the foggy window At the end of a tiring day When night comes, we return to our own star **Chorus** Let's float our sadness in the sky Even the unspoken feelings Even in the cold rain Let's look at the stars together The overflowing worries become small stars Just hold on for one more day I need help! Please give advice if the lyrics sound unnatural or if there are better expressions.